Lily, I think you have a solid premise for this paper. You seem to be angling for a more sentimental approach to the Soylent-vs-food question, and the personal anecdotes you provided work very well to that end. The introduction feels a bit scattered, however, and it takes a paragraph or so before the message of your paper becomes apparent. In your case, I believe your writing would be more effective if you stated a clear point of view earlier on. … Continue reading Peer Review